Sunday Club is for all children from the local community. Children or parents do not have to attend the church – just turn up on a Sunday and join in.
We meet on Sunday mornings between 10:30 and 12:00 (except when there is an all-age service) in a friendly and relaxed atmosphere. Our time together includes singing, bible stories, craft and many other activities.
We introduce the children to the love of God, the reality of forgiveness and eternal life through basic bible stories, teaching of right and wrong and personal encounter.
We have a group of adult volunteers who lead in Sunday Club on a rota basis. If you or your child would like to attend, please just turn up on any Sunday or contact us by email and one of our leaders will get in touch with you to answer any queries.
Alternatively, you are welcome to join us for our all-age services to see what we are about and meet us informally.
Mark's comments
"all" -> "any" or "All children from the local community are welcome to come to Sunday Club. [noting that there is no mention of age, unless you go further down to "under 14"]
Do we really need to include a concept of "attend" which is not defined. Suggest "Children or parents do not have to attend the church" since sounds odd, even as though we've got an online Sunday Club - you don't have to attend to go to Sunday Club, just login!!!
"Just turn up..." - unnecessary duplication of the last but one paragraph so suggest removal (currently sounds like an encouragement for stray children to walk in without parental contact with the leaders).
"Except when there is an all-age service" - Looks like this should have an asterisk on the end "...an all-age service*", with a footnote, stating that all-age services start at the same time, 10.30, and occur
as started or on the website . [noting that 12th July entry on the right doesn't follow the concept that it is either Sunday Club or All-Age Service. Suggest this be worded as "All-age service - Sunday Club Presentation (when the young people will be leading the service)"]
"basic bible stories" - is it necessary, or if so, do we mean "children's..."
"If you or your child would like to attend" - sounds a bit odd? Are we inviting an adult to come without a child? This is an invite, "if you would like your child to attend, please ...". [If we're trying to recruit parents, or other adults for Sunday Club, then leave that to "Get Involved" section, or natural invitation as Sunday Club parents get to know parents. If someone has experience with Sunday Club/Sunday School work and wants to get involved, then they would make contact with the church anyway. Just wary of people who may not be appropriate, targeting an open invitation online.
"Alternatively,,, to see what we are about and meet us informally" - maybe, join us for an all-age service and meet the Sunday School Leaders/Teachers afterwards for an informal chat over
